Fandom: Stargate: SG-1
Title: Weightless
Author: Em
Rating: PG
Word Count: ~530
Spoilers: "Heroes"
Characters: Daniel, Janet
Prompt: 017. Brown (Big Damn Table)
Summary: Janet's eyes don't flutter when my fingers pass over her eyelashes.
Notes: written for
stargatefic100.
This is part of a series called Perfection in a Kiss. The stories can be read in any order and independently of each other.
Special thanks to
surferartchick for betaing duties.
017. Brown
Weightless
Janet's eyes don't flutter when my fingers pass over her eyelashes. Skin, a delicate light brown that reminds me of Abydos, is soft and warm under my cupped hand. Her lips are slightly chapped, bitten rose colored.
She's perfect and I never noticed it before.
Janet invited us over to the house on a July Saturday. Cassie pulled Sam and me into the pool while Jack grilled hamburgers and Teal'c watched with one eyebrow raised. I talked to Janet, my arms slopping water on to the deck, and she leaned over and pushed my glasses on to my face, reminding me that it was time for my eye exam. After dinner, when Janet suggested washing the dishes, Jack lifted her up with one arm, her petite frame dangling over his shoulder, like she hardly weighed anything at all. She laughed, her face cracking wide in a bright smile. At Cassie's insistence, Jack tossed her mother into the pool. Janet came up sputtering, her short hair plastered against her neck, threatening Jack with long needles and prostate exams on his next trip to the infirmary.
I should have realized it then.
I lean over and kiss her rose bitten lips, taste the drying saliva. As I pull away, I lick my lips, trying to remember the gritty texture of the dirt in my mouth, the weight of my realization. I squeeze her still warm cheek, still warm but not moving.
A staff blast hits the tree over my head, and I belatedly duck. The medics suddenly come into focus. The dirt in the air is too sharp, too tangible, like film sped up and over exposed. The scurried motion around me is too fast, the frantic shouts too loud. Grenades explode behind me. I lean over Janet, feel the damp front of my shirt against my skin. A voice crackles at my chest. I don't have enough room in my head for this. I have to translate the words a few times before I comprehend: Jack's been hit, too.
"Dr. Jackson, we have to go. Jackson!"
A rough hand around my arm hauls me to my feet. My palm goes cold when it pulls away from Janet's face. There's blood.
I stumble with the others, gaining momentum as I run, getting my feet beneath me as I pull my mind together. We have to get back to the 'gate. There's a litter in front of me, carried by two marines. I have to help save Senior Airman Simon Wells. He has a son on the way and a staff blast through his midsection.
And if he dies, her sacrifice will have been for nothing.
I catch up to them, grab his outstretched wrist in my bloody palm, and say, "You're going to be okay."
An explosion to the right covers the sound of his words, but I can read his lips. "What about Dr. Frasier?"
I glance over my shoulder and see two soldiers lift a litter. They're running towards us, catching up quickly. The litter sags slightly in the middle, the weight of a body. But the way the men are running it looks light, like it hardly weighs anything at all.
~Comments and feedback are appreciated.
Title: Weightless
Author: Em
Rating: PG
Word Count: ~530
Spoilers: "Heroes"
Characters: Daniel, Janet
Prompt: 017. Brown (Big Damn Table)
Summary: Janet's eyes don't flutter when my fingers pass over her eyelashes.
Notes: written for
This is part of a series called Perfection in a Kiss. The stories can be read in any order and independently of each other.
Special thanks to
Weightless
Janet's eyes don't flutter when my fingers pass over her eyelashes. Skin, a delicate light brown that reminds me of Abydos, is soft and warm under my cupped hand. Her lips are slightly chapped, bitten rose colored.
She's perfect and I never noticed it before.
Janet invited us over to the house on a July Saturday. Cassie pulled Sam and me into the pool while Jack grilled hamburgers and Teal'c watched with one eyebrow raised. I talked to Janet, my arms slopping water on to the deck, and she leaned over and pushed my glasses on to my face, reminding me that it was time for my eye exam. After dinner, when Janet suggested washing the dishes, Jack lifted her up with one arm, her petite frame dangling over his shoulder, like she hardly weighed anything at all. She laughed, her face cracking wide in a bright smile. At Cassie's insistence, Jack tossed her mother into the pool. Janet came up sputtering, her short hair plastered against her neck, threatening Jack with long needles and prostate exams on his next trip to the infirmary.
I should have realized it then.
I lean over and kiss her rose bitten lips, taste the drying saliva. As I pull away, I lick my lips, trying to remember the gritty texture of the dirt in my mouth, the weight of my realization. I squeeze her still warm cheek, still warm but not moving.
A staff blast hits the tree over my head, and I belatedly duck. The medics suddenly come into focus. The dirt in the air is too sharp, too tangible, like film sped up and over exposed. The scurried motion around me is too fast, the frantic shouts too loud. Grenades explode behind me. I lean over Janet, feel the damp front of my shirt against my skin. A voice crackles at my chest. I don't have enough room in my head for this. I have to translate the words a few times before I comprehend: Jack's been hit, too.
"Dr. Jackson, we have to go. Jackson!"
A rough hand around my arm hauls me to my feet. My palm goes cold when it pulls away from Janet's face. There's blood.
I stumble with the others, gaining momentum as I run, getting my feet beneath me as I pull my mind together. We have to get back to the 'gate. There's a litter in front of me, carried by two marines. I have to help save Senior Airman Simon Wells. He has a son on the way and a staff blast through his midsection.
And if he dies, her sacrifice will have been for nothing.
I catch up to them, grab his outstretched wrist in my bloody palm, and say, "You're going to be okay."
An explosion to the right covers the sound of his words, but I can read his lips. "What about Dr. Frasier?"
I glance over my shoulder and see two soldiers lift a litter. They're running towards us, catching up quickly. The litter sags slightly in the middle, the weight of a body. But the way the men are running it looks light, like it hardly weighs anything at all.
~Comments and feedback are appreciated.
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Date: 2006-05-14 01:24 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-05-14 01:54 pm (UTC)Daniel is going to need a few hugs when I'm done with this series.
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Date: 2006-05-14 05:19 pm (UTC)I got a romantic leaning in this fic, too. At the very least, he has an intense love for her. I like the details, especially when Daniel comments on the dirt in the air and the film that has been sped up and over exposed. There's also a nice flowy, rhythm to Daniel's words.
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Date: 2006-05-14 06:48 pm (UTC)I do. MWHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! *cough*
At the very least, he has an intense love for her.
That I agree with. Not that I disagree with people who see romance, I did write it to be read either way. I do that with most of my gen fic.
I like the details, especially when Daniel comments on the dirt in the air and the film that has been sped up and over exposed. There's also a nice flowy, rhythm to Daniel's words.
Thank you, you know how I love writing Daniel. ;)
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Date: 2006-05-14 07:05 pm (UTC)Because in gen fic there is lots of subtext. :)
You're welcome! :) I do, I do!
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Date: 2006-05-14 07:07 pm (UTC)There's lots of subtext in everything. Or is that just me? ;)
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Date: 2006-05-14 07:12 pm (UTC)Not just you. My brain is wired the same way.
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Date: 2006-05-14 06:06 pm (UTC)It could so easily be read either way. It's almost as if he's seeing a 'what could have been', and it's heartbreaking to see what he's missed out on. And however you read, he's heartbroken that Janet's dead.
You're not weird. Or rather, not weird in a bad way. *g*
Daniel is going to need a few hugs when I'm done with this series.
I'd never have guessed... ;)
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Date: 2006-05-14 06:28 pm (UTC)As always, I present many fics for people to read into the pairing or gen as they want. ;)
Daniel is going to need a few hugs when I'm done with this series.
I'd never have guessed... ;)
Are you saying that I'm becoming predictable in my angst? ;) If I do the complete series I'm considering, 3 of the stories will be slash, so I'm sorry, but there will be some het and gen to even that out.
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Date: 2006-05-14 06:23 pm (UTC)This is fabulous - clear, lyrical, and emotionally resonant. Just beautiful writing!
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Date: 2006-05-14 07:04 pm (UTC)*sob*
Date: 2006-05-15 02:49 pm (UTC)Re: *sob*
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Date: 2006-05-16 06:54 pm (UTC)there was a lot of oomph for me when it snapped out of Daniel's reverie into the 'Heroes' battle.
That was intended, so I'm happy to know that it worked that way for you. Every time I've read it I felt that jarring sensation and I'm expecting it. ;)
Also neat how it ends on a sort of unresolved chord, in that Daniel doesn't answer Wells' question.
I didn't do that intentionally, or at least I didn't realize that the story ends on an unanswered question. Now that you pointed it out, I'm really glad that it does. ;) I think that works so well for this piece since it's about things being unresolved, about Daniel not realizing the potential until it was gone.
The story itself hangs there like something weightless at the end, with all the crushing weight of grief suspended, just beyond the ending.
That is such a beautiful way to describe it. Thank you so much for the thoughtful feedback.
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Date: 2006-05-16 02:54 pm (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2006-05-22 06:01 pm (UTC)Well, I'm sure it was a nice surprise. Uh, or heart attack.
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Date: 2006-06-05 06:22 am (UTC)Lovely work hun.
BTW, love your icon. So true.
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Date: 2006-06-05 01:02 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-10-17 04:44 pm (UTC)You did an excellent job. As always. *hugs*
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Date: 2006-09-03 09:38 pm (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2007-04-12 12:04 pm (UTC)Great. Instead of bored at work I am now depressed at work. Not good. I want to go home. But I have another hour to kill. Which I will use to catch up on internety stuff and read one or two other of your stories. Woot!
I am less then a year behind, did you notice?
*hugs you and Daniel*
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Date: 2007-04-12 02:17 pm (UTC)And even though you're now less than a year behind, there's still like 20 fics for you to read. The good news is that many of them are short.
*huggles*
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Date: 2007-04-12 02:44 pm (UTC)While them being short is good for making progress even better is that I lost all my bookmarks. *fake YAY!s*
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Date: 2007-04-12 03:08 pm (UTC)And my stuff is always easy to find. :D
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Date: 2007-04-12 04:41 pm (UTC)And thanks for that del.icio link. I might read some of those, though the most important stuff - Due South and Supernatural - isn't really on there. *sighs*
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Date: 2009-06-04 06:06 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2009-06-05 12:20 pm (UTC)(Wow. It's been a long time since I've gotten a comment on this fic. Thanks for leaving it!)
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