See now I get this. But I like the slash version so much better. Definite subtext there for sure and the slash version just feeds off that. Love that you kept most of the dialogue the same and the bit about Jack opening the car door? Nice thinly veiled threat there. Also about wanting to strangle Daniel because hell we all do sometimes. So yeah nicely done. And congrats on the placing. I just enjoyed the slash version much much more :)
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Date: 2006-03-20 04:39 am (UTC)